“The Son Who Confronted a Cold Father and Changed Everything”

✨ Suggestions for Enhancement (Optional):

1. Develop the Father’s Character Subtly Through Details

You describe his coldness well, but a few more specific past memories (even brief ones) could add emotional complexity. For example:

“He never raised his voice, but silence was his weapon. When I scraped my knee at nine, he handed me a bandage and walked away. When I got my first A in math, he nodded once and turned back to the newspaper.”

These small moments could give the reader more insight into why his rejection felt both expected and devastating.

2. Add More Sensory Details from the Early Years

To amplify the atmosphere and hardships you endured as a young mother, consider weaving in sensory-rich elements:

“The heater in that studio sounded like it coughed through the night. Liam and I huddled under thrift-store blankets, the windows frosted on the inside.”

These images can ground the reader even more fully in your experience.